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When to indent text: Laying out narrative and dialogue in fiction

27/7/2020

21 Comments

 
This post explains when and how to indent your narrative and dialogue according to publishing-industry convention.
To indent or not to indent: A quick guide to laying out narrative and dialogue in fiction
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The purpose of first-line indents
Each new paragraph signifies a change or shift of some sort ... perhaps a new idea, piece of action, thought or speaker, even a moderation or acceleration of pace. Still, the prose in all those paragraphs within a section is connected.

Paragraph indents have two purposes in fiction:

  • Readability: They help the reader identify the shifts visually.
  • Connectivity: They indicate a journey. Indented paragraphs are related to what's come before ... part of the same scene.

First lines in chapters and new sections
Chapters and sections are bigger shifts: perhaps the viewpoint character changes, or there's a shift in timeline or location.

To mark this bigger shift in a novel, it’s conventional not to indent the first line of text in a new chapter or a new section. You might hear editorial folks refer to this non-indented text as full out.

  • This is standard with narrative and dialogue.
  • The convention applies regardless of your line spacing.

NARRATIVE LAYOUT
The following example is taken from Part 5, Chapter 2, of Christopher Priest’s Inverted World (p. 287, 2010):
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  • Paragraph 1 is the first in the chapter.
  • The first line is not indented.
  • The first lines of the paragraphs that follow it (2) are indented.
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And here's an example from Part 2, Chapter 6, p. 147, which shows how the layout works the same after a section break:
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  • Paragraph 1 is the first in the section.
  • The first line is not indented.
  • The first lines of the paragraphs that follow it (2) are indented.
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Even if an author chooses to include a design feature such as a dropped capital (sometimes called a drop cap), it's standard for that letter to be full out, as shown in the following example from To Kill a Devil (John A. Connell, p. 6, Nailhead Publishing, 2020):

  • Paragraph 1 is the first in the chapter.
  • The capital letter on the first and second lines is not indented.
  • The first line of the paragraph that follows it (2) is indented.
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DIALOGUE LAYOUT
​The same applies even if the chapter or section starts with dialogue, as in this excerpt from David Rosenfelt's Dog Tags (p. 192, Grand Central, 2010):

  • Paragraph 1 is the first in the chapter.
  • The first line is not indented.
  • The first lines of the paragraphs that follow it (2) are indented.
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Body text: dialogue and narrative
The example below from Blake Crouch's Recursion (p. 4, Macmillan, 2019) shows how the indentation works in the body text when there's a mixture of dialogue and narrative.

  • Regardless of whether the prose is narrative or reported speech, the text is indented.
  • The convention applies regardless of line spacing.
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IMPACT OF LINE SPACING
Even if you've elected to set your book file with double line spacing (perhaps at the request of a publisher, agent or editor), the indentation convention applies. Here's the Recursion example again, tweaked to show what it would look like: 
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Indenting text that follows special elements
Your novel might include special elements such as letters, texts, reports, lists or newspaper articles. Authors can choose to set off these elements with wider line spacing, but how do we handle the text that comes after?

Again, it's conventional to indent text that follows this content, regardless of whether it's narrative or dialogue. That's because of the connective function; the text is part of the same scene.

​Here are some examples from commercial fiction pulled from my bookshelves.

  1. REPORT: The Outsider, Stephen King, Hodder, 2018, p. 252
  2. LIST: Life of Pi, Yann Martel, Canongate, 2002, p. 146
  3. TRANSCRIPT: Snap, Belinda Bauer, Black Swan, 2018, p. 36
  4. RECORD: Ready Player One, Ernest Cline, Arrow, 2012, p. 300
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It's not the case that full-out text is never used, or can't be used, but fiction readers are used to conventions. When a paragraph isn't indented, they assume it's a new section, which creates a tiny disconnect.

That's what I think's happened in the example below from Kate Hamer's The Girl in the Red Coat (p. 325, Faber & Faber, 2015). Of course, it took me only a split second to work out that the narrator is referring to the preceding letter, but it's a split second that took me away from the story because I'd assumed I was looking at a section break.

​My preference would be to indent 'I touch my finger [...]' because that text is part of the scene, not a new section.
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How to create a first-line indent in Word
Let's finish with some quick guidance on creating first-line indents. 

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Avoid using spaces and tabs to create indents in Word. Instead, create proper indents. There are several ways to do this.

  • Open the Home tab (1).
  • Select your text.
  • Move your cursor to the ruler and select the top marker (2).
  • Drag it to the position of your preferred indent.
  • Right-click on the style in the ribbon (3).
  • Select 'Update Normal to Match Selection'.​
OR​
  • Open the Home tab (1).
  • Open the Styles pane via the arrow icon (4).
  • Select your text.
  • Move your cursor to the ruler and select the top marker (2).
  • Drag it to the position of your preferred indent.
  • Go to the Styles pane (5) and right-click on the style (6).
  • Select 'Update Normal to Match Selection'.​ ​
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OR
  • Open the Home tab (1).
  • Open the Styles pane via the arrow icon (4).
  • Go to the Styles pane (5) and right-click on the style (6).
  • Select 'Modify' to open the Modify Styles pane (A).
  • Click on the Format button in the bottom left-hand corner (B).
  • Select Paragraph to open the Paragraph pane (C).
  • Make sure you're in the Indents and Spacing tab.
  • Look at the Indentations section in the middle. Make sure 'First line' is selected under 'Special:' (D).
  • Adjust the first-line indent according to your preference (E).
  • Click OK (F).
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Create a new style for your full-out paragraphs using the same tools.
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  • If using the ruler, ensure the markers (2) are aligned, one on top of the other.
  • If using the styles pane, adjust the indent spacing (E) to zero.

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21 Comments
Neetu R.
27/7/2020 07:57:47 am

This is so useful. Thank you so much.

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Louise Harnby
27/7/2020 01:19:34 pm

You're welcome, Neetu!

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Cathy Cade link
7/8/2020 05:56:39 pm

As a former librarian I insisted our writing group's self-published anthologies (that I was formatting) conformed to traditional convention (title page and reverse, fiction indents, section separators with blank reverse and all chapters on a new page...) but I see so many indie published books that don't , not to mention self-published paperbacks and e-books, that I wonder how long this will be the norm. It does identify the indies from the traditional publishers, which seems a shame, since the content can be comparable.

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Louise Harnby
7/8/2020 06:24:36 pm

Hi, Cathy. I think it often depends where the budget's going. Not all indies invest in a pro interior designer; they do it themselves. And if they don't know the conventions, they'll not bother. Good design should improve reader experience so I do think it's worth attending to the basics. Your group's lucky to have you!

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Vivienne link
7/8/2020 10:27:08 pm

This is most helpful. I was not aware of the convention of no indentation for the beginning of a chapter and change of scene, time etc.
Thank you.

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Louise Harnby
7/8/2020 11:07:50 pm

Glad it helped, Vivienne!

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Jessica Plancich
6/11/2020 06:20:06 pm

This is so clearly written and informative. It was a huge help to me. Thank you!

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Danielle Sensier
27/3/2021 10:32:18 am

Can you advise whether or not to indent at the start of a new section (not a new chapter) when the first line of the section is a line of dialogue. At present I am choosing not to indent in keeping with the new section format but is this correct? Thank you.

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Louise Harnby
27/3/2021 02:46:20 pm

Hi, Danielle. See the post above - the section on dialogue layout:
"​The same applies even if the chapter *or section* starts with dialogue."

Your current choice is therefore what I'd recommend.

HTH.

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Danielle Sensier
27/3/2021 05:31:48 pm

Thank you very much - this is most helpful. Just shows I should have read your advice more carefully in the first place!

Yash Narang
3/5/2021 10:58:13 am

I am confused whether I should indent the first line of a new page or not?

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Louise Harnby
5/5/2021 10:58:34 am

If a new chapter or section falls on a new page = no indent.
If it's just a new paragraph that falls on a new page = indent.

Hope that helps!

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Chip
27/5/2021 11:45:29 pm

Great article! I'd like to know if the same rule should be in non fiction where it is mostly narrative? Or is it better to have no indentions at all. I'm designing a book interior for a non fiction, still a story, and I went with no indention but I'm wondering if I should indent it after all.

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Louise Harnby
28/5/2021 11:14:38 am

That's a style choice, Chip.

You could have no indents but separate each paragraph with a space:

Xxxxxxx, xxxxx
xxxx xxxxxx xxxx
xxx.

Xxxxxxx, xxxxx
xxxx xxxxxx xxxx
xxx.

That's quite common in non-fic.

If, however, the text is formatted so that the paragraphs run on, it's common to go down the route I've outlined above.

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Patricia
8/2/2022 03:37:25 pm

Hi, Louise. When you have a drop cap, what do you do with the second line if the first sentence is a single line? Is the second sentence indented from the drop cap (i.e., from the point of the second letter in the first word), or does the second sentence start directly under the second letter, to prevent extra white space and align it more with the subsequent paragraphs? Thanks!

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Louise Harnby
9/2/2022 09:38:41 am

I'd still likely indent the second paragraph in line with all the other indented paragraphs.

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Patricia
9/2/2022 06:28:54 pm

So to confirm, in your example above that contains a drop cap, if the first paragraph was just a single line, say, "The train crawled along," I would start the second paragraph flush left, where the word "dusty" starts, rather than indenting the line.

Louise Harnby
10/2/2022 10:17:24 am

I'm not a pro formatter, Patricia, so I wouldn't want to insist on any particular style! I'd deal with it as I've outlined above when editing, but a designer responsible for a book's interior might well come up with a more aesthetically pleasing solution. I recommend you check out a few mainstream published books and look at how they handle the design, or ask pro formatters what they recommend.

Patricia
10/2/2022 12:51:46 pm

Thank you!

Ess Gee
6/4/2022 08:04:23 pm

Thank you for this. The piece I’m working on at the moment opens with four short lines of dialogue -
questions and answers between two characters. Does this count as one entire paragraph and should I treat it as such, ie full out for all four lines? And if so, does the subsequent paragraph, describing the characters and containing no dialogue, require indenting?

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Louise Harnby
8/4/2022 02:23:53 pm

Hi, Ess. Follow the guidance I gave under the heading DIALOGUE LAYOUT. So:
[No indent] "Hello," Ess said.
[Indent]: "Good to see you."
[Indent]: "Have you read this blog?"
[Indent]: "No."
[Indent]: Ess went and read the guidance about laying out narrative and text in fiction.

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